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this is a first draft only and need major work before it is posted. WHO ARE THEY? babes full videos where is the background and character development? Thanks for taking the time to write it.anonymous readerReport 2013-04-18 15:15:40a very good start but keep this story going.«123» 12 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-18 20:18:34THE BEST THING YOU CAN DO IS DELETE IT AND START OVER FROM THE BEGINNING. DO THE PARENTS FIND OUT? WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? delete and rewrite using a good editor before reposting THEN IT MIGHT BE WORTH READING.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 18:21:12Not really much to say that hasn’t already been said. AS IS THIS WAS WAY TO SHORT AND WAY TO RUSHED AND NEEDS TO BE DELETED.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-15 21:15:41not good this reads like it should be chapter two not one. It stands good on its own but I’d like to see you edit it and add more. delete and rewrite using a good editor before reposting THEN IT MIGHT BE WORTH READING.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 18:21:12Not really much to say that hasn’t already been said. A longer build up would help, i.e. WHAT KIND OF RELATIONSHIP DID THEY HAVE BEFORE THIS? who are they and why should we care about them or want them together? WHAT KIND OF SEXUAL EXPERIENCE DO THEY HAVE. I’d still give 5 stars for the story and look forward to part 2. DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS? where is the background and character development?