BANGBROS – Fiery Redhead Anna Bell Peaks Delivers Rough Pleasure! (btcp14085)

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horny-I think maintaining a rotation through the characters is a good idea and ID’ing each POV change would probabily been the biggest improvement. Pornhub I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. Cija-The story evolved like a shack turning into a mansion, my biggest regret was not making the POV changes read clearly. I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. I’ll try to write the sex if I can’t avoid it. Damn the consequences and space each paragraph as much as you want. WGF- That’s exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here. history? I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. Damn the consequences and space each paragraph as much as you want. Great story. The choppiness was partly intentional and partly the best I could do. I think I should have only changed POV’s a couple of times there. This is a good story to work with, continue? Add gratuitus sex to get more votes?cijababeReport 2011-03-08 03:16:25I loved it! The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters. I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. CijaonehandedtypistReport 2011-03-07 16:35:46Fuck the complainers ssalo. I don’t think it took away from the story. Add gratuitus sex to get more votes?cijababeReport 2011-03-08 03:16:25I loved it! I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. Top marks from me! I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like