My stepbro checks out my ass and things get super steamy

u’r critics a PITA! I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. HQporner I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. WGF- That’s exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here. I’ll try to write the sex if I can’t avoid it. I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. redo this in Berlin, 1945ssaloReport 2011-03-11 01:06:44Thanks everyone. The breaks with ID could help, maintain the rotation through the characters. Top marks from me! Don’t much want the the stroker’s votes. The sentences were a little short and choppy but that added to the style, and it was highly entertaining. I don’t think it took away from the story. I’ll try to write the sex if I can’t avoid it. WGF- That’s exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here. Great story. All of your comments are my big thing, thank you again.hornyelkReport 2011-03-10 19:05:57I liked the changing viewpoints, which at first were a bit unclear. I’ll try to write the sex if I can’t avoid it. Don’t much want the the stroker’s votes. Don’t know about continuing. I’ve been reading these for 15 months; same old, same old. All of your comments are my big thing, thank you again.hornyelkReport 2011-03-10 19:05:57I liked the changing viewpoints, which at first were a bit unclear.