Public Agent Elena Vedem Receives Rough Throat Exam and Hardcore Doggystyle POV
0This reads more like a list of actions than a story. Mofos You have to use variety in your choice of phrases, dude.anonymous readerReport 2012-07-08 00:39:01you need to code this shit.«1» You have to use variety in your choice of phrases, dude.anonymous readerReport 2012-07-08 00:39:01you need to code this shit.«1» 3 comments«1»Fernandez625Report 2012-07-08 03:00:53I know sorry I wanted it to come out nice but ended up making it sound weird sorry it’s my first story so I’m not really that sure how it’s supposed to go exactly but thanks for your input :)anonymous readerReport 2012-07-08 02:19:06I dont think Ive seen the phrases He Then, and Then He, used so often in a story. 3 comments«1»Fernandez625Report 2012-07-08 03:00:53I know sorry I wanted it to come out nice but ended up making it sound weird sorry it’s my first story so I’m not really that sure how it’s supposed to go exactly but thanks for your input :)anonymous readerReport 2012-07-08 02:19:06I dont think Ive seen the phrases He Then, and Then He, used so often in a story. 3 comments«1»Fernandez625Report 2012-07-08 03:00:53I know sorry I wanted it to come out nice but ended up making it sound weird sorry it’s my first story so I’m not really that sure how it’s supposed to go exactly but thanks for your input :)anonymous readerReport 2012-07-08 02:19:06I dont think Ive seen the phrases He Then, and Then He, used so often in a story.